Life As Liz

Now this is what I feel is my most favorite screenplay out of them all. I've put the most work and care into this one. Going through 5 different drafts and a polish job from someone who read it and loved it. But they looked through it and helped me out a bit.

The story is about a very good looking girl. She dresses and looks beautiful. But acts like a dude. She farts and burps more than any guy, has the messiest apartment ever. Says the most raunchiest things. She's like this cause she was raised with 4 brothers and is the youngest But has to take on the duties of running the family business. Especially since her dad dies, and her mom sits there in a coma like state. Along with her brothers being useless. She has alot to deal with. Both work and her personal life Because who she is and how she acts.

She has trouble with men. Because I'm sure it doesn't matter how hot a girl is. There's only so much a guy can take of it. But it's not her fault. That's just how she was raised.

This only leaves her with one option. Internet dating. She strikes up a internet relationship with this one guy (RUSSELL) This is because her brothers set up a dating profile as a joke. but she figured why not? What's the worse that can happen? They've never met only talked online via skype.

All is going good until he finally wants to meet her in person. She keeps saying no. But realizes that if she keeps saying no. He'll stop talking to her and she really likes him. So she agrees to it. Even though she knows it's not a good idea. He's from a different state, so he makes plans to arrive to meet her the next month when he's in town on business. So with the short amount of time she has before her "internet Bo" arrives. She uses that time to become more lady like with the help of her friend and brothers.

It'll almost in a way be like those Melissa McCarthy movies where she plays the character. But instead of a slob like character. It'll be a good looking girl instead. I mean think about it. You never really see anything like this. It's either a guy like Zach Galafankis or what Melissa McCarthy does in every single one of her movies. You can't say she doesn't. Cause she really does.

Elizabeth "Liz" Fitzpatrick (Main Female Character)
Russell (Main Male Lead Who talks to Liz online)
The Main family and friends live in Boston and have the Bostonian Accents.
They have a family like in the Fighter. But it's just one female in all male family.

As I said the film takes place in Boston. Her 4 brothers are Red Sox fans. Russell likes The Yankees and her brothers give her a hard time for dating a Yankees fan. (Even if he is from the West Coast) Seeing how much bad blood there is between the two teams and their respective fans. The brothers pick on both her and him when he arrives.
There's also references to The New England Patriots, Tom Brady and his wife Gisele.

Three big set pieces that include something happening in a parking lot at a tailgating event at Fenway Park before a Sox/Yankees game. A very romantic basketball scene that consists of Strip Horse and at a Karaoke Bar that involves singing Pat Benatar, Foreigner and Joan Jett songs. There's also this funny pizza scene. That's best if read.

I've got very excellent reviews from this. 7 out of 8 people loved it. and the person who didn't care for it said they liked the characters even if they didn't like the story for it.

Here is the most glowing review yet for this.

"Okay, finished reading your script in full (sorry for the delay), and while I had my doubts about the somewhat excessive profanity earlier on in the story, the rest of the screenplay turned to be a wonderful and entertaining comedy that had as much heart as it did humor. Once Russell met Liz and they began their friendship/romance, I was immediately hooked.

The one thing I especially liked about their romance, especially the climax, was that it was the woman chasing after the guy in the end, not the other way around, which has always been the norm in Hollywood. That was refreshing to see. It kinda felt like What's Your Number? in a way, with Anna Faris and Chris Evans. But you put your own cool twist on it by having the two be this wacky, geeky, yet madly-in-love couple who didn't have to end up together in the typical, cliché fashion of romance films.

The brothers were all funny as hell, and truly felt like the big brothers I expected them to be.

Denise was the perfect type of best friend for Liz who would help give her advice, yet be as vulgar and crazy as she was.

Russell's backstory brought everything together as to why he was kind of cool and reserved, and not just fawning over Liz right off the bat.

Loved how Liz's mother remained sorta comatose throughout the whole thing, only to wait until that right moment at the end to deliver her first line, which would ultimately help her daughter choose her path of happiness. Great mother/daughter moment at the end.

My only minor gripes were:

• Liz and Denise's conversations going slightly long.
• Liz's quirky, signature laugh after many scenes. Some scenes had great comedic one-liners that could've wrapped the scene up there, without the extra dialogue and laughing.
• Liz somewhat matured and improved with her ladylike qualities, but again, perhaps condensing the cursing, especially from Russell, would've helped balance out the two personalities.

All in all though, I was pleasantly surprised by how much I liked this script, since I'm a personal Yankee fan, and kinda despise Red Sox fans, but somewhere in the midst of all the potty humor, there was a great emotional story in there as well. You're well on track to making amazing scripts, and I look forward to seeing what else you have in store."

So as I mentioned at the start. This would have to be my favorite screenplay that I've written at the moment. I have plenty of other ideas for screenplays. All dealing in their own different genres.

I currently started a female comedy screenplay. So that should keep me busy for some time now.